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A Woman After The Curmudgeon’s Heart

And no, for once it’s not Mrs. Curmudgeon.

It all began when Yvonne Mason, a retired English teacher, wrote a letter to the president about the Florida school shooting in February.

Mrs. Mason was NOT happy with the letter she received in response, but it wasn’t the substance of the letter that bothered her.

It was the writing.

USA Today tells the story.

In 17 years of teaching English composition in South Carolina public schools, Yvonne Mason had seen these blunders many times before.

 Redundancies. Faulty capitalization. Lack of clarity and specificity.

 But Mason wasn’t grading a student paper. She was reading a letter she received from President Donald Trump.

 “I have never, ever, received a letter with this many silly mistakes,” Mason said.

 The former Mauldin High School teacher promptly did what she had done thousands of times before: She corrected the writing and returned it, this one going back to the White House.

Also,

“When you get letters from the highest level of government, you expect them to be at least mechanically correct,” Mason said.

 She dinged the Trump letter particularly for repeatedly capitalizing “nation,” “federal,” “president” and “state,” turning these common nouns into proper nouns.

 Using her signature purple ink — since harsh red ink is discouraged by some educators these days [Note:  The Curmudgeon ALWAYS uses red ink when he edits] — Mason identified 11 instances of faulty capitalization in Trump’s letter.

 ‘Federal’ is capitalized only when used as part of a proper noun, e.g. the name of an agency,” Mason wrote.

 She resisted the idea of attaching a grade to the letter.

 “If it had been written in middle school, I’d give it a C or C-plus,” she said. “If it had been written in high school, I’d give it a D.”

And this:

“When I taught school for 17 years, I taught my kids in English that the way you present yourself in writing says a lot about who you are, about what you care about, about whether or not you care to get it right.”

And

Mason’s comments also draw attention to redundant expressions and overuse of the pronoun “I” in Trump’s letter. And there’s a dangling modifier to boot.

 “It’s stylistically appalling,” she said.

 Mason, an advocate of “clear, precise writing,” directs Trump to the government website plainlanguage.gov, dedicated to encouraging federal officials to write with clarity and specificity.

 “Part of the idea of clear, precise writing is abiding by grammatical and mechanical standards so everyone can be on the same page,” Mason said. “Otherwise, you’re going to be misunderstood.”

Imagine that:  someone as curmudgeonly about this kind of thing as The Curmudgeon!

Watch out, Mrs. Curmudgeon:  there may be “another woman.”